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Originally Posted by stevem810
Thanks for your efforts to date.
suggestion: Drop the last line "should be created...." It implies 'guilt' if you don't or have other reasons and isn't really needed. Keep it simple and clean.
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good call. when used for a specific on-line league it's is a powerful statement of cultural direction
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We, the owners of Corporate League Baseball, hold this truth to be self-evident. Out of the Park Baseball is more than a game, it is a hobby, online leagues are an important aspect of the hobby experience and these leagues should be a relaxing, competitive, friendly and fun community experience. Corporate League Baseball was created to honor this truth. "
but when used in the more generic sense it's arbitrary and overbearing, and I was too close to "see" it.
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We, the citizens of the Out of the Park Developments Community, hold this truth to be self-evident. Out of the Park Baseball is more than a game, it is a hobby. Online leagues being an important aspect of the hobby experience should be a relaxing, competitive, friendly and fun community experience. "
is much better. thank you
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Commissioner rights:
Agree this is a bit more challenging but I'll leave a few ideas...
1. The right to remove a GM if he/she does does not meet the requirements of the league (this leaves room for leagues to define what is acceptable/not acceptable).
2. The right to deviate schedules, sims, and other league related activity (with sufficient notice) so that the commish may attend to personal affairs.
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I wonder if it should be "rights & responsibilities" rather than "rights"
and "responsibilities"? some of these seem to be 2 sides of the same coin, it may be easier & more natural to combine them. ...